Posted by: Jazcat
« on: March 23, 2025, 09:06:54 pm »There are a few here that need to be addressed so I'm listing them for you to work on when you find the time to do so. No rush.
1. BANNER - Not sure why the banner was missing but I added it back as this isn't something that's optional. Either crop the picture you're using for your character into a banner and put it here or find a new face claim for your character. I'd also suggest using lunapic.com for cropping purposes. That website is pretty simplistic for not heavy image tasks that you're trying to do and you can put in the exact size measurements you need as well.
2. FACE CLAIM & APPEARANCE - Nothing wrong with the image you're using but in the event you aren't able to crop said image into a banner on your own, it is advised to find a new one. It isn't a requirement as long as you do that. I did do a search image on Google so there are different variations of the image, though most of them have shorter hair. There are some with the image of longer hair but you have to look through them all. Hopefully, that helps and you can add them as extra images to your gallery too if you find any that pique your fancy.
3. HISTORY -
It would help to go a bit more into detail about Hitoshi's home life, which could help give some context to him eventually becoming the homebody type of person he is as an adult. What were his parents like and how did they treat him? Religion is mentioned here, which sounds associated with the parents, so if that is important, that needs to be explained. Why did they want Hitoshi to show more interest in religion than in the things he liked? Did they believe that his interests were setting him on the wrong path or a waste of time? That would be helpful to know. And some clarity if he was an only child which would also explain partially their focus on Hitoshi's interests and possibly think something is wrong with him because of it.
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The only thing that would be questioned here is why Hitoshi's parents wait so long to get internet. This goes back to the religion question and Hitoshi seeming like he wasn't interested in it and his parents felt some type of way about it and why they waited so long to get internet. An explanation for that would help a little but also explain more that since he was keeping his grades up in school, they didn't harass him much about using the internet. Maybe this being the start of how he became more of a homebodied person. Outside of that, adding in how and why Hitoshi took an interest in art would help out as well as it would explain where his inspiration for it came from that made him turn art into commission work for him.
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So, once he graduated high school at least state why he decided not to attend university, and also how he met Zach and the other characters to become acquainted with them. That way it won't just seem random that he just up and randomly knew these characters. That along with his decision to delve into 3D printing. Since Becca reached out to you recently about wanting to do a thread with this character, you can add to end it off how your character met hers and hope that by her becoming a possible new client for him to help her with her modeling career.
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So far, that's it, and hope it helps you out some. Should give you a good three or four paragraphs at most. If you have any questions, reach out if needed. Once you've made the fixes to the bio, ping the staff role to notify the other three staff members so one of them can check it over.
1. BANNER - Not sure why the banner was missing but I added it back as this isn't something that's optional. Either crop the picture you're using for your character into a banner and put it here or find a new face claim for your character. I'd also suggest using lunapic.com for cropping purposes. That website is pretty simplistic for not heavy image tasks that you're trying to do and you can put in the exact size measurements you need as well.
2. FACE CLAIM & APPEARANCE - Nothing wrong with the image you're using but in the event you aren't able to crop said image into a banner on your own, it is advised to find a new one. It isn't a requirement as long as you do that. I did do a search image on Google so there are different variations of the image, though most of them have shorter hair. There are some with the image of longer hair but you have to look through them all. Hopefully, that helps and you can add them as extra images to your gallery too if you find any that pique your fancy.
3. HISTORY -
- Hitoshi has always been a city child, his parents once said he showed such interest in tech, cartoons, and games, if he showed the same interest in religion he'd be a cardinal. Always asking how and why, he learned things quickly and saw connections and drew lines where few else he'd spoken to did as well.
It would help to go a bit more into detail about Hitoshi's home life, which could help give some context to him eventually becoming the homebody type of person he is as an adult. What were his parents like and how did they treat him? Religion is mentioned here, which sounds associated with the parents, so if that is important, that needs to be explained. Why did they want Hitoshi to show more interest in religion than in the things he liked? Did they believe that his interests were setting him on the wrong path or a waste of time? That would be helpful to know. And some clarity if he was an only child which would also explain partially their focus on Hitoshi's interests and possibly think something is wrong with him because of it.
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- His teachers found him either to be the most difficult child to deal with or their finest student. Once the Internet became more easily accessible his parents got one for the home and he was rarely seen away from it, but his grades were steady enough, and he always seemed to be looking at something remotely educational or doing something with an art program he'd found on it.
The only thing that would be questioned here is why Hitoshi's parents wait so long to get internet. This goes back to the religion question and Hitoshi seeming like he wasn't interested in it and his parents felt some type of way about it and why they waited so long to get internet. An explanation for that would help a little but also explain more that since he was keeping his grades up in school, they didn't harass him much about using the internet. Maybe this being the start of how he became more of a homebodied person. Outside of that, adding in how and why Hitoshi took an interest in art would help out as well as it would explain where his inspiration for it came from that made him turn art into commission work for him.
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- The things he did with the Paint program. Not even out of school he received commissions for artwork from not only his classmates but strangers online to the point that by his graduation he had a small solo business going where he made enough to support himself and after a couple years on his own a small corgi he found out on the streets near his apartment. Currently his primary income stems from his editing work as well as some light commission work on the side, and as of late he's been getting more and more interested in 3D printing and modeling things after losing his most profitable clients recently, making good deal of money from Zach for D&D and cosplay props.
So, once he graduated high school at least state why he decided not to attend university, and also how he met Zach and the other characters to become acquainted with them. That way it won't just seem random that he just up and randomly knew these characters. That along with his decision to delve into 3D printing. Since Becca reached out to you recently about wanting to do a thread with this character, you can add to end it off how your character met hers and hope that by her becoming a possible new client for him to help her with her modeling career.
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So far, that's it, and hope it helps you out some. Should give you a good three or four paragraphs at most. If you have any questions, reach out if needed. Once you've made the fixes to the bio, ping the staff role to notify the other three staff members so one of them can check it over.
